stds-802-16: stds.802-16: SUB11 COMMENT

[mika.kasslin@nokia.com]

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace sentence "The BWA" through "services" with
"The BWA system shall support all services (real time and non
real time) in a packet oriented manner."

[Reason for Edit]
Clearly defined requirement that clarifies the initial sentence.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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Delete lines 11 to 15

[Reason for Edit]
Contradictory with "MUST comply" in next paragraph. Statement on 
revisions and changes is obvious and fluff.

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Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add fifth competing technology: Native Ethernet

[Reason for Edit]
To add this market segment.

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Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace 3.5 with 4.2

[Reason for Edit]
Fits CEPT recommendations and covers all the bands.

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Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "near line-of-sight" with "non line-of-sight"

[Reason for Edit]
Non line-of-sight operation is also possible, not restricted to near 
line-of-sight. 

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "require" with "benefits from"

[Reason for Edit]
There is no direct need for NLOS operation, though signal 
attenuation from partial obstructions is still low enough to 
be technically compensated for (=solution for NLOS operation). 
This feature improves the system performance.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert after conditions. "Figure <as inserted below> shows an example 
deployment configuration. The base station can serve individual buildings, 
multiple subscribers in multiple buildings (using multiple radio links), 
or multiple subscribers in a single building by use of a single radio link 
and further in-building distribution systems. It shows the use of a 
repeater and route diversity in order to provide coverage in difficult
areas. 
This does not imply the use of these features in all systems. However 
it does require the capability to implement them if required, and leave 
them out if not."

[Reason for Edit]
This figure displays the typical deployment configuration of HIPERACCESS 
and is more comprehensive than the currently shown figure, which depicts 
a specific scenario. This should also be our basis in the interest of 
convergence of standards

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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Figure 2-1.

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Replace figure 2-1 with figure 4-3 from TR 101 177 V1.1.1 (1998-05) 
by ETSI/BRAN/HIPERACCESS

[Reason for Edit]
This figure displays the typical deployment configuration of 
HIPERACCESS and is more comprehensive than the currently 
shown figure, which depicts a specific scenario. This should 
also be our basis in the interest of convergence of standards

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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Delete lines 6 to 12: "The base station" through "possible."

[Reason for Edit]
The antenna solution is the manufacturer's and providers 
turf, not to be mandated by 802.16.3.

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Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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Delete the beginning of the sentence starting with "Since the base"
through "oriented". Start the sentence with "Multiple base station
radios will likely,".

[Reason for Edit]
The antenna solution is the manufacturer's and providers 
turf, not to be mandated by 802.16.3.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete lines 23 to 26: "Also" through "document."

[Reason for Edit]
The decision on an IDU/ODU vs. an ODU solution itself is 
entirely outside the scope of this document.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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Figure 2-2

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In Figure 2-2 delete the drawings inside the SS and BS boxes 
and delete the terms IDU and ODU.

[Reason for Edit]
The decision on an IDU/ODU vs. an ODU solution itself is 
entirely outside the scope of this document.

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Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete lines 26 through 29: "In the" through "contention-oriented bus,"
and start the sentence with "802.16.3 protocols".

[Reason for Edit]
This text is both fluff (who cares about similarities) and the poor 
arbitrary usage of the word channel might be mis-interpreted as 
implicitly mandating FDD.

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Kasslin

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Mika

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "telephony" with "voice services" throughout the whole
section.

[Reason for Edit]
Consistence throughout the section

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Kasslin

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Mika

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Delete lines 18 to 21: "The consumer" through "services)"

[Reason for Edit]
The statement does not provide any valuable information.

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Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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Delete the entire subsection 3.1.1.1

[Reason for Edit]
These statements here add nothing but fluff. The requirements for 
telephony services are sufficiently dealt with in the QoS section. 
The statement before this subsection already refers there, 
so there's no need to repeat that here without any hard values.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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Figure 4-1

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Delete both DAVIC and DIGITAL AUTO/VIDEO from the right 
column in the figure.

[Reason for Edit]
These titles and references are misleading and irrelevant. 
It is impossible to guarantee services if a parallel Video stream 
gobbles up bandwidth without consulting the MAC. Digital audio/
video should run on top of the MAC, not alongside.

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Kasslin

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Mika

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Delete lines 6 to 8: "Note that" through "layer."

[Reason for Edit]
ARQ shouldn't be ruled out already in this phase.

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Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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Delete " and DAV" in the sentence starting on line 11: "Like the"

[Reason for Edit]
DAV (Digital Audio/Video?) should run on top of the MAC, any
MAC convergence layer does not have to deal with its needs.

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Mika

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace 99.94% with 99.95%

[Reason for Edit]
More commonly used value

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Mika

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete sentence "Note that" through "a year."

[Reason for Edit]
Irrelevant information.

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Mika

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Insert after "see section)." "In a multicell environment intercell 
interference can not be neglected as an outage increasing factor."

[Reason for Edit]
There should be a requirement providing that some level of 
interference resilience is supported.

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Kasslin

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Mika

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Delete bullet points on lines 26 and 27.

[Reason for Edit]
Implementation issue, leave to manufacturers and providers 
(range determined by number of sectors and antenna type etc.)

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Kasslin

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Mika

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Appendix, 1

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Delete rows M9, M10 and M12.

[Reason for Edit]
These statements don't occur in the text.

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Appendix, 3

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Delete the last incomplete sentence "This" through "provisioning"

[Reason for Edit]
Useless and misleading sentence

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Kasslin

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Mika

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Appendix, 3

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete "Protocol" till end of text

[Reason for Edit]
Incomplete and irrelevant sentence

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Kasslin

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Mika

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Appendix, 5

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace 99.94% with 99.95%

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency with the text in section 5.4 if the corresponding
earlier comment is approved.

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Kasslin

[Submitter's First Name]
Mika

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Appendix, 5

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete the following bullet points:
	"- Radio range (shaped sector radius)"
	"- Width of the sector"

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency with the text in section 5.7 if the corresponding
earlier comment is approved.