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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add a space after "to" in "toaddress"

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Correct typo

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Add space after "and" in "andlegacy"

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
"see G.114] appears to be extraneous. Is it supposed to be connected to
the
previous paragraph?

[Reason for Edit]
Correct typo.

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Remove blank lines

[Reason for Edit]
Correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change 300 to 150

[Reason for Edit]
300 ms is not what is stated in G.114 for end to end (one way) delay.
G.114 recommends
a 0-150 ms one way delay is acceptable for most user applications.
150-400 ms is "Acceptable provided that Administrations are aware of the

transmission time impact on the transmission quality of user
applications"

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Qconnection iduality" to "QoS connection"

[Reason for Edit]
Correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "unsolicitied" to "unsolicited"

[Reason for Edit]
correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "14 bits" to "16 bits" and remove "(athough the Connection ID is
sometimes
carried in the low-order bits of a 16-bit field)

[Reason for Edit]
CID is defined throughout the document as a 16-bit identifier, not
14-bit.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Throughout the document either change occurrences of Primary CID to
Basic CID or
change Basic CID to Primary CID

[Reason for Edit]
Throughout the document the terms Primary CID and Basic CID are
used to refer to the same CID. Only one term should be used. The term
chosen for CID (primary or basic) should also be used to refer to the
corresponding service flow.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Remove "2000-04-14 IEEE 802.16.1mc-00/14r0" from the end of the
paragraph.

[Reason for Edit]
Correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Definition of mini-slot does not match the definition in 2.1.1.2,
2.5.2.1 and 2.6.7.2
(three different definitions). Is it supposed to be 2m or 2 the power of
m.
Is the range of m 0 to 7 or 1 to 8?

[Reason for Edit]
To correct inconsistencies.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change 5.4.1.3 to 2.6.7.2. Table references should also be corrected.

[Reason for Edit]
To correct an invalid cross-reference. However I am not absolutely sure
this is the correct new reference.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Minimum Mini-slot size is defined as 32 modulation symbols. However
according to
sections 2.1.1.2 and 2.6.7.2 the minimum size should be either
4 (4 symbols * 2 power 0) or  8 (4 symbols * 2 power 1). If the true
minimum is 32 symbols then "m" should have a minimum value of  3.

[Reason for Edit]
To correct discrepancies.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
change "likeIP" to "like IP"

[Reason for Edit]
correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
change "CIDpermits" to "CID permits"

[Reason for Edit]
correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
change "having" to "have"

[Reason for Edit]
correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
change "SS.It" to "SS. It"

[Reason for Edit]
correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "ip1,ip2,ip3,ip4" to "IP Address"

[Reason for Edit]
Field is now 4 or 16 bytes and new definition matches other IP address
definitions
in document.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Sect" to "Set"

[Reason for Edit]
Correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "below:" to "below and encoded as per RFC-2131"

[Reason for Edit]
clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
""field in s" and "Value is from one to 254 s" don't make sense. I am
not sure of
what it is supposed to say so can't offer suggested fix. Should "s" be
"bytes"?

[Reason for Edit]
Correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Remove "Bit #2 Reserved Bit #3 Reserved"

[Reason for Edit]
Doesn't make sense

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add "The field definitions are provided in Table 5".

[Reason for Edit]
clarity
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Mangament" to "Management"

[Reason for Edit]
Correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
After "periodic interval" insert "(see Table 2)"

[Reason for Edit]
clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "each 1 long" to "each 1 byte long"

[Reason for Edit]
Insert missing word

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
MAC sublayer domain is used many times in this document and is not
defined. A
definition needs to be added.

[Reason for Edit]
To reduce confusion. Later in the document values are unique within the
"Mac
sublayer domain". We need to understand the scope.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Move Table 8 to Section 2.5.4 and insert reference to it in section
2.5.4

[Reason for Edit]
Table 8 is not referenced anywhere in the document and it is very
confusing
where it is.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Move Table 9 to section 2.5.2.1

[Reason for Edit]
To reduce confusion

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "IUC low threshold" to "IUC exit threshold". Change description
to
"The C/I+N value that when reached, requires the SS to switch to a more
robust IUC, in 1/4 dB units. See Figure 76."

[Reason for Edit]
To match the changes made to Figure 76 at the last meeting.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "IUC high threshold" to "IUC minimum entry threshold". Change
description to
"The minimum C/I+N required to use this IUC when a change to a less
robust IUC
is desired, in 1/4 dB units. See Figure 76."

[Reason for Edit]
To match the changes made to Figure 76 at the last meeting.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change 16 to 12. After groups insert "(see section 2.5.2.2)"

[Reason for Edit]
Correct discrepancy.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Downlink Interval Usage Code" to "Uplink Interval Usage Code"

[Reason for Edit]
I believe the wrong name has been used.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Remove table 13

[Reason for Edit]
This table is a duplicate of table 8.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change reference to table 13 to be reference to table 8.

[Reason for Edit]
Table 8 and 13 are duplicates. Another comment has suggested removal of
table 13.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change names of "Data Grant n" to "Data Grant Type n"

[Reason for Edit]
This area is quite confusing. It appears as if there can be only 6 data
grants for
the uplink. In reality, these are types of data grants, not data grants.
These fields
should be renamed throughout the document. In fact it might be better to
change
the name to "Data Grant Burst Type" to match the downlink.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Subscriber Station" to "Base Station" and vice versa

[Reason for Edit]
Block names in figure 126 are incorrect.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add "byte" after "1"

[Reason for Edit]
Add missing word.


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Remove "allowing the CID shall be encoded in a type/length/value form".
Text under the figure "CID (From the MAC Management Header) Temporary
CID for this SS" should be replaced with "The CID in the MAC Management
Header is the Temporary CID for this SS." The next sentence should
be part of the same paragraph.

[Reason for Edit]
Current sentences don't make sense.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
How does the SS IP address differ from the TFTP Server Provisioned SS
Address?

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity.


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Remove mention of Data Grants being pairs.

[Reason for Edit]
Does not match Table 13 and we can't see any requirement for pairs.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Indicate that the UIUC is 4 bits in length in the table.

[Reason for Edit]
In this section the UIUC is defined, but is only listed as 4 bits in
length for the burst descriptor encoding. Either the length has to be
mentioned for all occurrences of UIUC in this document or the length
needs to be defined when the field is defined.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Indicate that the DIUC is 4 bits in length.

[Reason for Edit]
The DIUC is used in a number of msgs but the length is only mentioned
for the downlink burst descriptor.

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Bit numbers need to be added to the figure. In addition, the definition
of the bits after the UIUC need to be defined since the UIUC is only
4 bits.

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity

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Bit numbers need to be added to figure 22. In addition, the definition
of
the bits after the DIUC need to be defined since the DIUC is only
4 bits.

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Add bit numbers to figure 34

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity for field lengths.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete ", including MAC version". Insert "The MAC version is encoded as
in Figure xx.".
Add figure number to MAC version encoding. Indicate bit numbers on
figure.
Open Issue - how are MAC versions numbered?

[Reason for Edit]
MAC Version is not in the Registration request as is mentioned in the
sentence. MAC
version encoding is unclear.

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Add bit numbers to this figure and all figures that require it.

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity - need to know field sizes

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add reference to section 2.3.5.4 for service flow error encodings.

[Reason for Edit]
clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "structurse" to "structures".

[Reason for Edit]
Correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace the first paragraph with the following.

A burst FDD system refers to a system in which the upstream and
downstream channels are located on separate frequencies but the
downstream data is transmitted in bursts. This facilitates the use of
different modulation types and allows the system to simultaneously
support full duplex subscriber stations (ones which can
tranmit and receive simultaneously) and optionally half duplex
subscriber stations (ones which cannot transmit and receive
simultaneously). If half duplex subscriber stations
are supported,this mode of operation imposes a restriction on the
bandwidth controller not to allocate upstream bandwidth for a half
duplex subscriber station at the same time that the subscriber station
is expected toreceive  data on the downstream channel. Frequency
separation is as defined in section 2.6.1.1.

[Reason for Edit]
Current description is oriented towards half-duplex stations except for
final note.
This is confusing. Also FSDD used to be separate from Burst FDD which
separated
half duplex and full duplex terminals. Half duplex should be optional.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace the 1st sentence with the following.

A full duplex subscriber station must always attempt to listen to the
downstream
channel. A half duplex subscriber stations must always attempt to listen
to the
downstream channel when it is not transmitting in the upstream channel.

[Reason for Edit]
Sentence is oriented towards half-duplex only.

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Change "theCD" to "the UCD"

[Reason for Edit]
Correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The word "untranmitted" in the bottom right box of the figure is not
properly visible.

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
In bottom right box in Figure 62, change "SDU" to "1st SDU"

[Reason for Edit]
For clarity since two SDUs have been mentioned.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
What does the "Bandwidth for CIDx" decision box in the centre of the
figure mean
in the context of grant per terminal? It appears as if this decision box
is
redundant

[Reason for Edit]
To remove confusion.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "need polled" to "need to be polled"

[Reason for Edit]
Correct typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
BWA PID does not appear anywhere else in this document nor does H.222.
What does
this sentence mean?

[Reason for Edit]
Reduce confusion

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace this section with the following.

The MAC sublayer shall search for the DL-MAP and DCD MAC messages. The
CPE achieves
MAC synchronization for a channel once it has received at least one
DL-MAP
message and one DCD message.

Add a new section after 2.11.4 called "Loss of Syncrhonization" with the

following contents.

The CPE MAC remains in sychronization as long as it continues to
successfully
receive the DL-MAP, UL-MAP, DCD, and UCD messages. If at least one of
these
messages is not received within the time intervals specified in Table 2,
the CPE
shall not use the upstream and shall try to re-establish
synchronization.


[Reason for Edit]
This section is confusing. The first change is because the section is
supposed to
be for obtaining downlink parameters.

The proposed change may not be completely correct.
Section 2.2 only specifies Lost Sync wrt the DL-MAP msg (e.g. it doesn't
take into account other messages such as the UCD. The Time between UCDs
is set to 2 seconds however is only 1 allowed to be lost? Need
clarification!

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After interval" insert "(see Table 2)

[Reason for Edit]
clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert new row, "DCD Interval, Time between transmission of DCD
messsages" with
maximum value of 2 seconds.

[Reason for Edit]
Interval is currently undefined.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Physical" to "Uplink"

[Reason for Edit]
Match names.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change Figure 67 as follows. Visio version has been emailed to the
editor.
All instances of the word channel should be replaced with "uplink
channel" for clarity.
Change scanning (line 12) to "Scanning for downlink channel"
Line 17 Change to "Wait for UCD for selected channel"
Add box on line 21 with decision box containing "Uplink channel
suitable?"
Add no line to box going to the right to meet the other no line
Line 37, change to "Wait for UL-MAP which contains initial ranging
interval
for selected uplink channel"
Line 41, change to UL-MAP for selected uplink channel
Line 58, change to "Establish IP Connectivity".


[Reason for Edit]
Correct discrepancies in SDL and make less confusing.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert. "If initial ranging is successful then the SS attempts to
establish IP
connectivity."

[Reason for Edit]
For clarity. Also Station Mtce in SDL is changed to Establish IP
connectivity.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Physical" to "Uplink"

[Reason for Edit]
name changed

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
GPT and GPC definitions are reversed. Also in the GPC (formerly GPT)
definition
"a connections" should be "a specific connection"

[Reason for Edit]
Correct discepancy

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
SS uplink is not used in document, don't understand definition, should
be removed.

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Paragraph should  be removed.

[Reason for Edit]
E.164 addresses are not ATM addresses, even though they may be used by
ATM systems.
Also the ATM convergence sublayer should not be looking at ATM
addresses, although
it may map from ATM VPI/VCIs to CIDs.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
TCP/IP header compression is not mentioned elsewhere in this document.
Is it supported?

[Reason for Edit]
Ask question?

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Remove "from"

[Reason for Edit]
Correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
This paragraph, wrt the number of mandatory connections, contradicts
section
2.1.2. Which is correct?

[Reason for Edit]
Reduce confusion.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
I thought the Basic/Primary CIDs were only used for MAC msgs, not data?

[Reason for Edit]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Section header number is incorrect.

[Reason for Edit]
correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert "The upstream channel id is unique within the downstream channel
only."

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Privacy is enable/disabled on a per connection basis. If this is a
global flag then
the paragraph should be reworded as follows, otherwise the section
should be deleted.

This configuration setting enables/disables Privacy on the Primary
Service flow and
all other service flows which have been configured for encryption.

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "code 43" to "type 43"

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "directory path name" with "directory path name which is a
character in a format appropriate to the server. There is no requirement
that the character string be null terminated; the length field always
identifies the end of string."

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Why does the SS need to know the guard time size? When slots are
allocated by
the base station, do they include the guard slots and therefore the SS
must
calculate the slots to be used for data and the slots to be reserved for
guard?
This needs to be clearly specified in the document.

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert "A base station is considered compliant to this standard if it
supports at
least one of Mode A or Mode B".

[Reason for Edit]
Make explicit what is required for BS to be compliant.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Offset = map length" to "Offset = the length of the last IE to
be actually
assigned bandwidth".

[Reason for Edit]
Since the offset is supposed to result in an inferred length of zero and

the offset is supposed to be an offset, not an absolute value, an
Offset = map length is invalid.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "request a" to "request"

[Reason for Edit]
correct typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Piggy-back requests" sentence to the following.
"In the GPT mode, additional bandwidth for a different connection may be

requested using the Bandwidth Request Header."

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity - piggy backs don't use bandwidth request.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
All message flows should be labelled as Figures, not Tables.

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
This is a stray sentence. What does it mean?

[Reason for Edit]
Reduce confusion.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Note 1 is missing. Is it supposed to be the "Means ranging is within
the tolerable limits of the BS" which is on the next page?

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity

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To what does this paragraph refer?

[Reason for Edit]
clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The thresholds are now in the DCD message so all references to
thresholds in
the RNG-RSP should be replaced with DCD.

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Thresholds are now in DCD and should be removed from RNG-RSP

[Reason for Edit]
consistency

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
after "QoS Parameter Sets" insert "to the BS in the DSC-REQ message"

Same change to the 1st sentence of the next paragraph.

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
At the end of the sentence insert "with a offset equal to the length of
the previous
IE."

[Reason for Edit]
The offset definition is very important to understand the length and
therefore must be clearly
defined.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Burst needs to be defined both for uplink and downlink. For example in
the downlink
we use the concept of TDM burst and TMDA burst. This needs to be
defined. (For example
TDM burst defn would be along the lines of a set of data being
transmitted to one or
more users using one set of PHY parameters (modulation, FEC etc. are all
the same).
Also do we need the concept of TDMA burst any longer.

[Reason for Edit]
Concept of burst is causing confusion. It needs to be very clear that
changing some
Phy parameter means that it is a separate burst.

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Add reference to section 2.5.3 (DL-MAP definition).

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
If   the shortened option is chosen, how does the receiver figure out
the size
of the shortened code word? Instead should the shortened code word
length
be explicitly provided?

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity