Hello Robert,
Thanks a lot for preparing D0.3 of the TGax draft.
Please find below a list of suggestions to improve the draft's alignment with motioned concepts and improve it editorially (Page and line references refer to the Redlined version of D0.3 with respect to D0.2):
P11L62: "might use" --> "can use" as instructed by (#172)
P12L01 the following motioned text is missing: "An HE non-AP STA uses the Queue Size subfield to indicate the amount of buffered traffic intended for the STA identified by the receiver address of the frame containing the QoS Control field." as instructed by a motion in 779r6 (TGax agenda)
P12L11: "may remain constant" --> "can remain constant" as instructed by (#172) [the reason was changed is because in clause 9 there should be no normative behavior statements]. Also the underline should not be for all the sentence as part of it is baseline REVmc.
P19L19-23: It seems the text is not inline with resolution of (#340). From a quick check B0 to B4 indicate the 0 to 31 dB range in the motioned document while in the draft the whole subfield signals it which seems in conflict to me.
P22L60: Please underline "Multi-STA BlockAck" in the last column of the table.
P23L08: subclause heading should be moved to P21L02.
P25L57: This note seems to better fit if located in P25L63.
P26L17: "If the Ack Type subfield is 1, then the Block Ack Starting Sequence Control and Block Ack Bitmap subfields are present." --> " If the Ack Type subfield is 0...".
P26L58: " When B0 of the .... is 1" --> " When B0 of the .... is 0"
P27L06: " When B0 of the .... is 0" --> " When B0 of the .... is 1"
P27L25: Amendment to subclause 9.3.1.20 is missing (see 11-16-773r2)
P28L62: Table heading found at the bottom of the table. Please move at the top inline with baseline (several tables had this inconsistency).
P31L36: There seems to be missing motioned text: "When operating 40MHz in 2.4GHz band, two SR fields, SR field 1 and SR field 2, are set to same values. When operating 80+80MHz, SR field 3 is set to same value as SR field 1, and SR field 4 is set to to same value as SR field 2."
P31L45-48: I am taking an AI to suggest the author of 16/780r1 to fix this inconsistency.
P32L17: A motioned text is missing: "Per User Info fields with AID = 0 shall be allocated only after Per User Info fields with AID not equals to 0, if any, and before the MAC padding field, if present."
P32L48: Editorial "B12 the first bit is set to" -> B12 is set to".
P34:L1: Bit locations added on top of field format dont follow baseline conventions. Please list them in increasing order.
P37L44-60: Would be good to list them as items of the paragraph in L38.
P40-P41: Subclauses 9.4.1.62 and 9.4.1.63 were amended by document 11-16-0836r1, however these changes are missing in the draft.
P40-P41: Similarly a new subclause 9.4.1.64 was added by the same docuemnt 836r1 but is missing.
P40-P41: Similarly a subclause 9.4.1.6x was added by document 11-16-773r2 but is missing.
P46: Some HE Capabilities indications added by document 11-16-897r1 are missing in the draft.
P52L62-65: This paragraph needs to be removed due to addition of paragraph in P53L1-5.
P52L11: Document 836r1 adds a line for HE Action field in Table 9-46 which is missing in D0.3.Following hte same trend it also added a couple subclauses dependent of 9.6 that are missing.
P54L2: Please underline: "A HE MU PPDU does not carry more than one A-MPDU that contains one or more MPDUs soliciting an immediate response that is not carried in an HE trigger-based PPDU."
P60L63..: Some changes of document 861r1 are missing in this subclause: "more than one" -> "one or more".
P64L1: Addition of this sentence is missing: "A value of 3 in the Control ID subfield when the transmitting STA follows the corresponding buffer status report procedure, as described in 25.5.2.5 (HE buffer status feeback operation for UL MU)." as instructed by 806r0.
P64L33: the following addition is missing "...across all MPDUs with equal value of the TID subfield" at the end of the sentence as instructed by 806r0.
P64L40: Some motioned text is missing: "When an HE STA successfully receives the corresponding acknowledgement frame in response to the MPDU sent in HE trigger based PPDU, the backoff for the associated EDCAF resumes the backoff counter countdown. When an HE STA does not receive the corresponding acknowledgement frame in response to the MPDU sent in HE trigger based PPDU, the backoff for the associated EDCAF resumes the backoff counter countdown. If an HE STA does not successfully receive the corresponding acknowledgement frame in response to the MPDU sent in an HE trigger based PPDU, the short retry counters and long retry counters for the associated EDCAF are not changed."
P74L34: To keep consistency either put the paragraph as bulleted list (as instructed by 828r0) or simply replace "that contains. One" with that contains one".
P75L54: Please replace "may support" with "shall support" as instructed in 828r0. Also please classify as depending item the sentence starting with "The term oustanding..."
P78L4-14: CHanges as instructed by 917r1 are missing in D0.3.
P80L43-47: It seems the addition of this paragraph is in the wrong subclause. Seems the instruction was to add to 25.10.4. Also please replace "Basic Trigger variant Trigger frame" with "Basic variant Trigger frame" throughout.
P84L62: Editorial addition seems to not be inline with the text of 806r0: extra "one of the following" and removal of the "either" "or" at the start of the items that follow. Since either or is not exclusive the addition of "one of the following would forbid to allow both which is not the intention of the document.
P86L43: I am taking an AI to suggest the author of 16/773r2 to fix this inconsistency.
P90L11: An added subclause 25.6.2 by 16/773r2 is missing in D0.3.
Hope this feedback helps to improve the subsequent version of the TGax draft.
PS: I did not go through the PHY subclause 26.
Best Regards,
Alfred
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