Re: [STDS-802-11-TGM] Review

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Hi Adrian,

The results of my review are attached.

Thanks,

Dorothy

From: Stephens, Adrian P [mailto:Adrian.P.Stephens@xxxxxxxxx]
Sent: Monday, November 10, 2014 6:30 AM
To: Dorothy Stanley; Michael Montemurro (montemurro.michael@xxxxxxxxx); Peter Ecclesine (pecclesi); Edward Au (edwardau@xxxxxxxxxxx); Qi, Emily H; brianh@xxxxxxxxx; Carlos Aldana (caldana@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx); Dan Harkins; 'Fei Tong (Fei.Tong@xxxxxxx)'; Gabor Bajko; jon.rosdahl@xxxxxxx; qi.wang@xxxxxxxxxxxx; Stephen McCann (smccann@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx); wookbong.lee@xxxxxxx; Kim, Youhan
Cc: stds-802-11-tgm@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Subject: Review - gentle reminder

Dear reviewers,

If you have sent your findings to me, many thanks.

If you have not sent your findings to me, today is the deadline.

Best Regards,

Adrian P STEPHENS

Tel: +44 (1793) 404825 (office)
Tel: +44 (7920) 084 900 (mobile, UK)

Tel: +1 (408) 2397485 (mobile, USA)

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From: Stephens, Adrian P
Sent: 27 October 2014 14:51
To: Dorothy Stanley (DStanley@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx); Michael Montemurro (montemurro.michael@xxxxxxxxx); Peter Ecclesine (pecclesi); Edward Au (edwardau@xxxxxxxxxxx); Qi, Emily H; brianh@xxxxxxxxx; Carlos Aldana (caldana@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx); Dan N Harkins - Aruba Networks, Inc. (dharkins@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx); 'Fei Tong (Fei.Tong@xxxxxxx)'; Gabor Bajko; jon.rosdahl@xxxxxxx; qi.wang@xxxxxxxxxxxx; Stephen McCann (smccann@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx); wookbong.lee@xxxxxxx; 'Kim, Youhan'
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Subject: Review kickoff for REVmc D3.3

Dear all,

Now is the time for the D3.3 review kickoff. The deadline for the review is Monday 10^th November (2 weeks from now).

There are three classes of folks addressed here:

1. Volunteer reviewers (Dorothy, Peter and MikeM)

2. First listed submission authors

3. Editors

I have assigned all technical comments associated with a submission to the first author for reviewing,

split the remaining technical comments among the three volunteers.

The editorials have been assigned so that ED_A reviews ED_Q’s work and vice versa, and my edits

are split between them for review.

Except for the technical for review (Submission Authors), each review has a separate tab (comment group).

Here is a summary of the totals – only yellow highlight is relevant

LB	Owning Ad-hoc	Comment Group	Unassigned	Discuss	Review	Assigned	Resolution Drafted	Ready for Motion	Approved	Submission Required	Grand Total
202	EDITOR	Editorials				8	4			1	13
		Editorials for Review by ED_A				1	35		142		178
		Editorials for Review by ED_Q	2			1	29		163		195
		Editorials needing TGmc input			1					1	2
		Editorials objected to					1				1
		technical for review (Dorothy)							38		38
		technical for review (MikeM)		1			1		82		84
		Technical for review (submission author)							65		65

For the technical submissions, I’d ask the first author to review, or find a replacement:

Query2
Ref	CountOfCID	Author	CIDs
1-14-0780-02-000m-lb202-stephens-	6	Adrian Stephens	3036, 3104, 3116, 3153, 3332, 3341
1-14/780	4	Adrian Stephens	3005, 3011, 3013, 3069, 3293
1-14/930	5	Brian Hart	3074, 3203, 3204, 3208, 3265
1-14/933	10	Carlos Aldana	3034, 3076, 3108, 3110, 3111, 3112, 3115, 3266, 3268, 3375, 3469
1-14/1002	5	Carlos Aldana	3033, 3206, 3207, 3267, 3468
1-14-0916	2	Dan Harkins	3037, 3040
1-14/922	1	Dorothy Stanley	3615
1-14/1041	7	Dorothy Stanley	3518, 3568, 3647, 3665, 3740, 3742, 3743
1-14/902	2	Fei Tong	3174, 3175
1-14-0902-02-000m-	5	Fei Tong	3161, 3162, 3163, 3165, 3167
1-14/1024	2	Gabor Bajko	3151, 3269
1-14/1004	1	Jon Rosdahl	3768
1-14/923	1	Michael Montemurro	3218
1-14/0923	1	Michael Montemurro	3322
1-14/919	1	Qi Wang	3262
1-14/918	1	Qi Wang	3261
1-14/1058	1	Stephen McCann	3774
1-14/1003	4	Wookbong Lee	3025, 3134, 3480, 3484
1-14-1283	5	Youhan Kim	3166, 3176, 3177, 3189, 3190
1-14/921	1	Youhan Kim	3309

The attached contains the comments, resolutions, edit notes and a tab for your findings.

Instructions:

The redline suffers from artefacts resulting from the frame-maker comparison process (see the redline notes at the start of the redline draft). If you find a problem in the redline, locate it first in the clean draft before reporting it.

Fill in any defects you observe in the defects spreadsheet supplied and email your copy of this spreadsheet to your technical editor as soon as you have finished your assignment.

How to report Defects

For each defect fill in a new row of the defect spreadsheet.

The columns of the spreadsheet are:

Reviewer	Your name goes here
Sequence number	Invent a number 1 up. These are used to cross reference between comments from different reviewers.
Page	The printed page number (i.e. what shows on the page) from the clean review draft. It is not necessarily the same as the .pdf page number. Do not quote the page number from the redline draft as you will create a hopelessly confused editor, who wants to spare his one remaining grey cell to for the problem in hand.
Line	You can guess
Clause	Clause/Subclause/Annex number of material containing defect
Related CID(s)	CIDs of comment(s) resolution causing this defect
Comment	Your description of the defect
Proposed Solution	What needs to be done to fix it
Editor Response, Editor Notes, Pending action	Ignore these fields.

Please fill in as much data as necessary. But there is no need to slavishly fill in all the fields. Just provide enough detail to make it unambiguous.

If you find yourself spending a lot of time reporting a systematic error, it may save you time to discuss with the editor whether this is actually an issue first.

Please read the Editor’s Notes at the start of the draft. They explain the use of tags and cross-reference styles. These have provoked unnecessary review comments in the past.

Also, please note that when a tag appears in a cross-reference caption (e.g. 7.2 (Ice-cream vendors(#1234)), it will appear as plain (i.e., not green) text. There’s nothing I can do to change this. Please do not report this as a defect.

Goals of the review

The goals of this review are to answer the questions:

Did the editor make the changes indicated in the resolution?
Did the editor make any non-editorial changes?
- If you believe that any change is non-editorial, please highlight it. I will ensure that any such comment is brought to motion in TGmb with special notice so that it gets proper attention.
Are the changes introduced by the resolution flagged with the sequence (#1234)? (these are show with a green colour). Is a flag the correct one?
- Note, some changes are deliberately not flagged, where this is so, this is indicated in the “Edit Notes” field of the comment.
(when working on speculative changes only) Sanity check on proposed resolutions.
- Does it make sense to you?
- These resolutions will be brought to TGmc for approval. If you disagree with the resolution, by all means discuss with the editor. Any unresolvable disagreements on resolutions will need to be addressed in that group.

Non-Goals

The following is not a goal of the review:

To identify new technical bugs in the standard (save them somewhere safe for the next letter ballot). I cannot remedy any such defect as my license as editor does not permit me to make technical changes except under explicit instruction of the task group.
To identify new editorial changes with substantial scope. Anything that is more than a trivial editorial change will need a letter ballot comment.

Best Regards,

Adrian P STEPHENS

Tel: +44 (1793) 404825 (office)
Tel: +44 (7920) 084 900 (mobile, UK)

Tel: +1 (408) 2397485 (mobile, USA)

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Re: [STDS-802-11-TGM] Review - gentle reminder