stds-802-16: SUSREQ COMMENT

[Francois Simon <fsimon@pilotresearch.com>]

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace the second "Figure 1-1" instance with "Figure 1-2"

[Reason for Edit]
Provide the correct market reference

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Propose to replace "rain fall" with "atmospheric conditions"

[Reason for Edit]
Atmospheric conditions, other than rain, such as snow, hail, fog,
and even clouds may also alter the operating range of 802.16 
radios.


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "servicse" with "services".

[Reason for Edit]
Misspelled word


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Remove "ISDN PRI" from the list.

[Reason for Edit]
The list already contains "Q.931" which is the ITU-T signaling
protocol for ISDN BRI and PRI. Thus, ISDN PRI is redundant.


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add "Q.931" to the list.

[Reason for Edit]
ATM, as mentioned, elsewhere in the document, provides support for
telephony and video conferencing.  It seems natural that the ATM
signaling protocol should be included here.


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add "(Q.931)" between "protocols" and "to establish"

[Reason for Edit]
Provides the reader with a reference to the ATM message-based
signaling protocol.


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add "(Q.933)" between "defined and "and in use".

[Reason for Edit]
Provides the reader with a reference to the Frame Relay signaling
protocol.


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "rain fall" with "atmospheric conditions"

[Reason for Edit]
Atmospheric conditions, other than rain, such as snow, hail,
fog and clouds may also affect the target performance levels.


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "rain fall (rain rate and droplet size and other factors)"
with "atmospheric conditions (e.g.: rain rate and droplet size and
other factors)".

[Reason for Edit]
Atmospheric conditions other than rain (snow, fog, hail, may 
contributes to excessive attenuation.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "rain fall" with "atmospheric conditions".

[Reason for Edit]
Already addressed in previous comments


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "rain fall" with "atmospheric conditions"

[Reason for Edit]
Already addressed in previous comments


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "rain fall" with "atmospheric conditions".

[Reason for Edit]
Already addressed with previous related comments.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete the word "between"

[Reason for Edit]
The sentence is meaningless as it stands


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "maximum error rates" with "minimum error rates".

[Reason for Edit]
While it can be views both ways, a positive statement is better 
than a negative one!.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "rain" with "atmospheric conditions".

[Reason for Edit]
Already addressed in previous comments


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Moving the word "rate" at the end of "Non-Real-Time" and place
it after "Variable Bit" so that the expression reads "Variable
Bit Rate: Non-Real-Time".

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency with the ATM Forum definition

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Reorder the list in the following fashion: Fault management;
Configuration management; Accounting management; Performance
management; Security.

[Reason for Edit]
Very minute point - This change provides the order compatible with
the widely used acronym FCAPS (Fault, Configuration, Accounting,
Performance, Security) to specify the 5 network management 
disciplines.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add the following, or equivalent, to the end of the paragraph:
"The 802.16 protocols MUST also permits subscribers to monitor
performance service levels of the 802.16 services being provided
at the delivery point".

[Reason for Edit]
The current trend in the industry is that more and more 'users'
of telecommunications services want to monitor the service being
provided to them to insure compliance to the SLAs.  The current
text, as it stands, seems to address the 802.16 operator view 
point only.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "BTS" with "base station"

[Reason for Edit]
Maintain consistency with this version of the document.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
No particular change proposed

[Reason for Edit]
The 802.16 working group(s) may want to look at the work being
done (if not already done so) by the 802.11 related to security.
It is not suggested here that an 802.11 network is similar to
a 802.16 network.  However, there may be similar security issues.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete space between "station at" and the start of the next
line

[Reason for Edit]
Facilitate reading of the document.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete the space between "station from" and the start of the 
next line.

[Reason for Edit]
Facilitate the reading of the document


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add "CoS - Class of Service" to the table.

[Reason for Edit]
Provide consistency with the rest of the table; QoS is specified.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Remove 'rate' at the end of "variable Bit Rate: Non-Real-Time
rate" so that is reads "Variable Bite Rate: Non-Real-Time".

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency with ATM Forum Definition