stds-802-16: Re: Sub11 COMMENT (Muya Wachira)

[Brian_Petry@3com.com]

I accepted these comments.
-Brian

Sent by:  "Roger B. Marks" <r.b.marks@ieee.org>


To:   Brian Petry/PA/3Com
cc:   muya@nortelnetworks.com
Subject:  Re: BOUNCE stds-802-16@majordomo.ieee.org




Can you accept this?

Muya Wachira keeps submitting it with HTML, which the reflector won't accept.

Roger

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[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "service" by "service capabilities" in lines 7 and 8 (two places)

  [Reason for Edit]
To generalize the field of application of the 802.16.3 systems. We need to
focus on services capabilities so
that operators may build services according to their own market
requirements.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
2

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10

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "802.16.3 systems provide" by "802.16.3 systems will be able to
provide"

  [Reason for Edit]
Grammar

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

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2

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grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add a new sentence:  "As far as possible, these should be common across the
802.16 systems"

  [Reason for Edit]
Commonality improves efficiency.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

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3

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30

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "similar to wired broadband access technologies such as.." by
"similar to those of certain
wired access technologies such as..".
[Reason for Edit]
It is the markets that are similar

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
3

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42

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "fixed position customers" by "fixed position customer stations"

[Reason for Edit]
To improve the text

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
4

[Starting Line #]
7

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "in section, an 802.16.3" with "in section 1.1, an 802.16.3"

Other missing section numbers on page 5 line 27 (see section 8); page 6 line
23 (see section 6);
page 7 line 2 (section 2), line 24 (Section 6) page 9 (in section 3.1); page
11 line 3 (see section
5.5), line 27 (section 5.7); page 12 line 15 (section 6.2); page 13 (section
3?)

[Reason for Edit]
Missing section numbers.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
4

[Starting Line #]
11

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "the standard *in* more generally applicable...1 GHz to 10 GHz" with
"the standard
*is* more generally applicable... 2 GHz to 11 GHz"

[Reason for Edit]
Correct typo and maintain consistency on the upper frequency limit.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
4

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12

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "The standard is" with "Equipment based on this standard is".

[Reason for Edit]
Clarification.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
4

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13

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grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "require near line-of-sight (NLOS)" by "will be required to support
both line-of-sight (LOS)
and non line-of-sight" (NLOS)"

[Reason for Edit]
To permit universal applicability of the standard.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
4

[Starting Line #]
15

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos,
grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "systems" with "system"

[Reason for Edit]
Grammar.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
5

[Starting Line #]
4

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos,
grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "concern for" by "the interest of"

  [Reason for Edit]
To improve the text

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
5

[Starting Line #]
5

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos,
grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "subscribers" by "subscriber stations"
[Reason for Edit]
To be consistent. The system consists of stations.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
5

[Starting Line #]
7

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Instead of "radiating" would "transmitting" or "emitting" be more
appropriate here?

[Reason for Edit]
To use a better term

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
5

[Starting Line #]
12

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos,
grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "possible" by "supported"

[Reason for Edit]
To be precise.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
5

[Starting Line #]
24

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grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Remove the sentence starting on line 23, and also the following sentence.

[Reason for Edit]
 From a standards perspective, there is no need to differentiate between
outdoor and indoor units. That is an
implementation issue. At the subscriber end, the antenna could even be
indoors, and at the BTS end,
everything except the antenna might be indoors.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
5

[Starting Line #]
27

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "(see section)." With "(see section 8)."

[Reason for Edit]
Missing section number.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
6

[Starting Line #]
1

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace  "residential networks" by "residential (customer premises)
networks"

  [Reason for Edit]
To further clarify.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
6

[Starting Line #]
8

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "(see section)." With "(see section 3)."

[Reason for Edit]
Missing section number.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
6

[Starting Line #]
12

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grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
In the figure, remove the reference to IDU and ODU.

[Reason for Edit]
 From a standards perspective, there is no need to differentiate between
outdoor and indoor units. That is an
implementation issue.

[Reason for Edit]
Missing section numbers.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
6

[Starting Line #]
35

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos,
grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
delete "bearer"

[Reason for Edit]
The section on bearer services from original document was deleted.


  [Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
6

[Starting Line #]
33

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grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Propose to replace this section by:

Section 3: Service Capabilities

An 802.16.3 system SHALL support fixed wireless access to IP networks at bit
rates of up to [10
Mbit/s].  Voice services will be carried as "voice over IP."

[Reason for Edit]
To generalize the field of application of the 802.16.3 systems. We need to
focus on services capabilities so
that operators may build services according to their own market
requirements.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
10

[Starting Line #]
31

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos,
grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "provide the peak capacity from 2-10 Mbps " to "provide the capacity
from 1-10 Mbps "

[Reason for Edit]
To accommodate the narrower channel bandwidths that might be required to
work into realistic frequency
re-use plans in areas where spectrum is limited, e.g. MMDS operators with
only a few channels, 3.5 GHz
band where 802.16.3 system must share 25 MHz with legacy circuit-switched
FWA systems.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
10

[Starting Line #]
33

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos,
grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "delivered bandwidth " to "delivered capacity"

[Reason for Edit]
Capacity is the correct term for bits/sec.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
11

[Starting Line #]
33

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grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "from about 99.9 To 99.94% " with "from about 99.9 To 99.99% "
[Reason for Edit]
To be consistent with market requirements and technology capabilities.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
13

[Starting Line #]
21

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grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
In Table 1 column 4 row 7 replace "10 ms  " with "100 ms "
[Reason for Edit]
Delay of 10 ms for packet-oriented connections is too short.  VoIP can
tolerate up to about 150 ms delay, as
long as frame error rate is below about 1%.


[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
17

[Starting Line #]
*22*

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The Appendices should be numbered
A. Requirements Summary
A.1 Mandatory
A.2 Recommended (R)
A.3 Optional (O)
B.  Vocabulary of Terms
B.1 Definitions
B.2 Acronyms and Abbreviations
Appropriate page numbering should be used.

[Reason for Edit]
Ease of reference.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
17

[Starting Line #]
Table 2

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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Once the revision of the main text is complete, Tables 2 to 4 should be
revised to correspond with
the changes made in the document.

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency with  the text in section 1 to 9.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
7 (of Appendices)

[Starting Line #]
Bandwith; communication

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos,
grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace the term "bandwidth " with " capacity"

[Reason for Edit]
Referring to capacity as "bandwith" is colloquial usage, and we should use
the correct terms - bandwidth
expressed in Hz and capacity in bit/s or bps.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
8 (of Appendices)

[Starting Line #]
Dynamically

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "according to negotiated user requirements" with "according to
dynamically negotiated
user requirements and/or network availability"

[Reason for Edit]
To introduce the concept of dynamism in the definition and also indicate
that network availability
could also  trigger/cause/impact this variability.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
9 (of Appendices)

[Starting Line #]
Frequency Division Duplex

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grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert "Techniques for" before "Separation"

[Reason for Edit]
To indicate that FDD is not the separation itself as implied in the draft
text.

[Submitter's Last Name]
Wachira

[Submitter's First Name]
Muya

[Starting Page #]
10 (of Appendices)

[Starting Line #]
Time Division Duplex

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos,
grammar, etc.]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert "Techniques for" before "Separation"

[Reason for Edit]
To indicate that TDD is not the separation itself as implied in the draft
text.