stds-802-16: TG1 COMMENTS

[Ken Stanwood <ken@ensemblecom.com>]

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert "and imply modulation and FEC" at the end of the sentence.

[Reason for Edit]
More complete definition

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The definitions of Grant Per Connection and Grant Per Terminal are reversed.

[Reason for Edit]
To fix a typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Superscript the "m" in "2m".

[Reason for Edit]
Typo - the "m" is an exponent, not a multiplier.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change] Insert a
space between "A" and "group"

[Reason for Edit]
To fix a typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Start second sentence "For instance with QAM modulation, each"

[Reason for Edit]
Some future PHYs may not use QAM modulation.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change definition of "SS" to be "Subscriber Station" and put in proper
alphabetical order.

[Reason for Edit]
To fix a global replace error.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change definition of EUI to "Extended Unique Identifier"

[Reason for Edit]
To fix a typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
add closing parenthesis to Figure title.

[Reason for Edit]
To fix a typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "toaddress" to "to address"

[Reason for Edit]
To fix a typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add Synchronous Digital Hierarchy and Plesiochronous Digital Hierarchy to
section 1.2

[Reason for Edit]
Reference says they are there, but they're not.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "SS stations" to "SSs"

[Reason for Edit]
"stations" is redundant with the second S in "SS"

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
remove opening parenthesis in front of "30%"

[Reason for Edit]
To fix a typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
remove blank lines and have this line start at the end of line 4.  Also,
change "delay is should" to "delay should"

[Reason for Edit]
To fix a typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The primitives should have a fragmentation granularity parameter.  This
should also be a connection parameter.

[Reason for Edit]
For some connections, it may be reasonable to restrict MAC layer
fragmentation to something other than byte boundaries.  For example, a
connection the carries ATM cells with header compression may restrict the
fragmentation to multiples of 48 bytes. 

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The MAC-CREATE-CONNECTION.indication should have a connection ID in the case
where the .request was generated by the BS.

[Reason for Edit]
Convergence sublayer on the CPE needs to get the connection ID.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The paragraph is inconsistent with the fact that the MAC-DATA.request
primitive on page 26 shows an encryption flag.  The question arises as to
whether the MAC retains such information about the connections or if the CL
must tell it for every PDU.  Since these primitives are just a logical
internal interface, not a required set of messages it doesn't really matter
which way we go, as long as the BS and CPE both have the same info through
the provisioning or dynamic addition of connections, we just need to be
consistent.

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The primitive should contain a packet discard eligibility flag like the
.request had.  There may be upstream points where non-conforming packets may
need to be discarded in congestion scenarios.

[Reason for Edit]
Need end-to-end packet discard eligibility to support ATM and other traffic
types.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Need "Convergence Sublayer Pass Through (CPT)" parameter both here and in
the .indication primitive on page 27.

[Reason for Edit]
See my submittal on the ATM convergence sublayer for why this might be
useful.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
This primitive should not contain an encryption flag.  Also delete paragraph
starting at line 42.

[Reason for Edit]
Data is already decrypted by this point.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "cidused" to "used"

[Reason for Edit]
To fix a typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "IDs" to "ID" and change "are" to "is".

[Reason for Edit]
To fix a typo in the restructuring of this sentence from the last round of
comments.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "likeIP" to "like IP".  On line 2, change "CIDpermits" to "CID
permits". On lines 2, 6, 12, and 19, the word "CID" always has an extra
space preceding it.

[Reason for Edit]
To fix typos

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "the downstream channel" to "each downstream and upstream channel"

[Reason for Edit]
clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add DCD Interval to table

[Reason for Edit]
PCD was broken into UCD and DCD.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
We need to be certain that all necessary TLVs are here, and that there
aren't any TLVs here that aren't in some message.  In general, were
inconsistent with where we define TLVs.  We define some here, some with the
individual messages in the MAC message section, some in the privacy section.
I think we need a more consistent methodology for defining and referencing
the defined TLVs.

[Reason for Edit]
Eliminate confusion

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete extra space before comma.

[Reason for Edit]
To fix a typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add a space between first and second sentences.

[Reason for Edit]
To fix a typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Again, we have an inconsistency in how and where we define TLVs.  This
section needs to at least reference the privacy section where the TLVs are
defined.  As it stands it's a worthless section.  Preferably, we need a
consistent approach to TLVs to make certain we don't overload type values
when the context doesn't keep the overloading from creating ambiguity.

[Reason for Edit]
clarity and consistency