stds-802-16: stds-803-16: TG1 Comments

[Scott Marin <smarin@ix.netcom.com>]

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Add definition of Channel ID (used on page 35, line 14), which is
apparently different than the CID or replace the term Channel ID with
CID, whichever is correct.

[Reason for Edit]
Confusion: Are the terms "Channel ID" and "CID" different or the same?

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Assuming the following is correct, insert new definition: Service Flow
ID (SFID): An identifier for a service flow.

[Reason for Edit]
SFID is not defined in the definitions or acronym list but is used on
page 3, line 29. 

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Change "cidused" to "used"
[Reason for Edit]
typo


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Change "Each SS shall maintain a 48-bit MAC address for globally unique
addressing purposes." to "Each SS shall have a globally-unique 48-Bit
MAC address."

[Reason for Edit]
improved clarity of the requirement.

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Assuming the subsequent statement is correct, insert new sentence after
sentence ending in "... selected during initialization." that reads
"Note, the channel ID and the CID are different terms."

[Reason for Edit]
clarity

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
At the beginning of the sentence, change "SS use" to "A SS uses"

[Reason for Edit]
Grammar improvement

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Change "Since the BS authenticates SS" to "Since the BS authenticates a
SS"

[Reason for Edit]
grammar improvement.

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[Reason for Edit]
The use of the term SA is confusing (grammatically) in several places on
page 207. On page 207, line 29, SA is defined as a set of information,
which is OK, but later on page 207, line 37 SA is personified (e.g.
Security Association's) which implies that a SA is a thing that owns
something. On page 207, line 45, the term SAID is used but not defined
on page 207 or in the definitions section either. On page 207, line 62,
SA is used possessively again (e.g. SA's). 
 
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[Reason for Edit]
On page 207, Line 65, is says that an SS must request new keying
material from the BS before the set of keying material expires. What if
the SS is off-the-air and the keying material expires? Add a sentence
that explains how an SS resynchronizes after keying material expires.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]

[Reason for Edit]
The phrase "about to time out" seems incorrect. The wording implies that
a future state is being anticipated, which is an interesting way to
design a finite state machine. If the wording is correct then how many
seconds are involved in the "about to time out" state?

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert new sentence, "Modems compliant to European Telecommunication
Standards Institute specification 'Digital Video Broadcast (DVB) Frame
Structure, Channel Coding and Modulation for 11/12 GHz Satellite
Services,' EN 300-421 are may be compatible with Mode A transmissions."
If change is accepted, add EN 300-421 to the bibliography (page 321,
line TBD).

[Reason for Edit]
Alert reader of possible implementation, but use the words "may be
compatible" so as to not require compatibility with future revisions of
the 802.16 or ETSI specs.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace "to the antenna output port" with "to the antenna input port."

[Reason for Edit]
The "output port" of a transmitter is the radiated signal. Normally
transmitter characteristics are measured in watts in the output of the
transmitter and input to the transmitter antenna. 

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace the phrase "as the average power, measured" with the phase "as
the time-averaged power when emitting a signal (excluding off-time
between bursts), measured"

[Reason for Edit]
More precise and clearly indicates that the average is over time and not
frequency. Also indicates that transmitter off time is not included in
the time average.