stds-802-16: stds-803-16: TG2 Comment

[Scott Marin <smarin@ix.netcom.com>]

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change "base transceiver station" to "base station (BS)"

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency with TG1. The system requirements document changed the term
"base transceiver station" to "base station" several meetings ago. 

For those paragraphs in the definitions sections that have acronyms, it
helps readability to have the acronym in the title.

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after "broadband wireless access" insert "(BWA)"

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity. 
For those paragraphs in the definitions sections that have acronyms, it
helps readability to have the acronym in the title.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
global change "BTS" to "BS" and "STS" to "SS"

[Reason for Edit]
consistency with TG1 and the functional requirements document.

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insert new paragraph "Central Station" 

[Reason for Edit]
The term central station is used (e.g. page 20, line 41), but it's
unclear what a central station is or why it's different than a BS. If a
BS is the same as a central station, then globally replace central
station with BS.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
after "frequency division duplex" insert "(FDD)"

[Reason for Edit]
For those paragraphs in the definitions sections that have acronyms, it
helps readability to have the acronym in the title.

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after "out-of-band emission" insert "(OOB)"

[Reason for Edit]
For those paragraphs in the definitions sections that have acronyms, it
helps readability to have the acronym in the title.

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Insert: While the OOB definition as written is often used as the
practical definition of OOB for some radio services, the ITU Radio
Regulations (S1.144) define OOB as "Emission on a frequency or
frequencies immediately outside the necessary bandwidth which results
from the modulation process, but excluding spurious emissions."

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency with the ITU Radio Regulations.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]change
"power control" to "automatic transmit power control (ATPC)

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency with ITU and industry standard nomenclature. 

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after "flux density" insert "(PSFD)"

[Reason for Edit]
For those paragraphs in the definitions sections that have acronyms, it
helps readability to have the acronym in the title.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
global change "Watts/MHz/m^2" to "Watts/MHz-m^2"

[Reason for Edit]
Although the IEEE editors may change to another form later in the
process, the term "Watts/MHz-m^2" clearly indicates that m^2 is in the
denominator; whereas, Watts/MHz/m^2 is equivalent to Watt-m^2/MHz, which
is incorrect.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
change "subscriber transceiver station" to "subscriber station (SS)"

[Reason for Edit]
consistency with TG1 and the functional requirements.
For those paragraphs in the definitions sections that have acronyms, it
helps readability to have the acronym in the title.


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after "division duplex" insert "(TDD)"

[Reason for Edit]
For those paragraphs in the definitions sections that have acronyms, it
helps readability to have the acronym in the title.

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Insert two new sentences: While the above definition is commonly used in
practice, the ITU Radio Regulation (S.145) define spurious emission as
follows: "Emission on a frequency or frequencies what are outside the
necessary bandwidth and the level of which may be reduced without
affecting the corresponding transmission of information. Spurious
emissions include harmonic emissions, parasitic emissions, inter
modulation products and frequency conversion products, but exclude
out-of-band emissions."

[Reason for Edit]
constancy with ITU Radio Regulations.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
change "BTS      Base Transceiver Station" to "BS        Base Station"


[Reason for Edit]
consistency with TG1 and the functional requirements doc. Besides, the
BS may not be a Transceiver.


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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
insert new acronym, "C/(N+I)           Carrier to noise and interference
ratio."

[Reason for Edit]
Use of the term, C/(N+I), will help clean up several difficulties in
later sections of the document.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
change "Carrier Wave" to "Continuous Wave"

[Reason for Edit]
Hasn't CW has always stood for continuous wave?

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "IL" to "ICL"

[Reason for Edit]
The change might help readability.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "RPT" to "RS" or "RPTS" 

[Reason for Edit]
help readability. "RPT" without an "S" is an acronym of adjectives
without the noun, which in this case is "station".

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
change "STS           Subscriber Transceiver Station" to "SS     
Subscriber Station"

[Reason for Edit]
consistency with TG1 and the functional requirements document.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
go back and add "CoCH" and "AdjCH" to the acronym list.

[Reason for Edit]
acronyms used but not defined in section 3.2

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
insert new acronym, "I/N      Interference to noise ratio"

[Reason for Edit]
The -6 dB term that is used later in the document is an I/N. Defining
and using the term I/N will aide clarity improvements of several
sentences. 


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Change "Adopt a "6 dB below receiver thermal noise in the victim
receiver criterion" as being a value of interference from each
interfering station, which is "acceptable." to "Adopt an I/N criteria of
-6 dB. Interference, from a transmitting station, that causes an I/N
less than -6 dB is considered acceptable."

[Reason for Edit]
clarity.

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change "... 1 dB degradation in his receiver sensitivity from each of
the operators." to "... 1 dB degradation, i.e. the difference in dB
between C/N and C/(N+I)."

[Reason for Edit]
clarity. 

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Change sentence "In some regard, the -6 dB value becomes the definition
of "coexistence." to "In some regard, an I/N of -6 dB becomes the
criterion for "coexistence."

[Reason for Edit]
clarity.

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change "..., an operator may have a -6 dB contribution from multiple
CoCh and AdjCh operators." to "..., a victim receiver may have a
interference contributions from multiple CoCh and AdjCh transmitting
stations each causing an I/N of -6 dB and the aggregate interference
causes an I/N of greater than -6 dB.

[Reason for Edit]
clarity

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every place the -6 dB is used, should be adjusted to state that the I/N
is -6 dB.

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity. 

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change phrase "incumbents/first movers" to "operators who deploy early"

[Reason for Edit]
less informal style



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change "harmonised" to "coordinated" or "standard"

[Reason for Edit]
What does harmonised mean? add sentence to define "Harmonised" or change
to a better term.

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change "which is dominated by increasingly severe" to "which exhibits
occasional but increasingly severe"


[Reason for Edit]
The whole paragraph has several negative statements that could scare
away most operators, subscribers, and investors. Consider adding a
sentence like "The characteristics of the medium are statistically
predictable, and with appropriate design, BWA systems can deliver
reliable service."

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change "A simple way to introduce a margin for interference into the
link budget is to increase the noise floor by a factor which accounts
for the additive interference that will be considered as additional
noise." to "A way to account for interference is to determine the
quantity C/(N+I)."

[Reason for Edit]
The term "increase the noise floor" is very miss leading. Perhaps a
better descriptions it to allowing for interference by noting C/(N+I)
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