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Attached are the editorial fixes (not all covered by comments) of the OAM clause. Leon Clause 12 - Page 408, line 2: Double full stop after the word "network" - Page 409, line 34: sesThreshold is bold and all other variables aren't - Page 409, line 34: Missing period before "to declare" - Page 412, line 49: according with comments 525 and 526 (they refer other places but similar issue) replace "The contents and number of bytes in this field.." with: The contents in this field..." - Figure 12.6: Something wrong with the fonts - Page 416, line 27: Replace "Table 6.1. (See.." with: "Table 6.1 (see.." - Page 419, line 10: according with comment 556 (refers to the previous line but similar issue) replace: "previously" with: "all previously" - Replace Table 12.6 with DVJ write up. Delete 12.4.1.6 and add all necessary variables, definitions and routines to 12.4.5. - Page 409, line 36 and page 415 line 24: Replace "Annex L" with: "Annex K" John's comments Clause 12 p407: Change "Provide mechanism" to "Provide a mechanism". p408: Change "network.." to "network.". p409: Change "Q_OAM_REQ" to correct font size. p409: Add Q_RX_ECHO_REQ, Q_RX_ECHO_RSP, Q_RX_FLUSH, Q_RX_ORG, and Q_TX_RS. p409: Remove bold from "sesThreshold:" and remove ":". p409: Change "(see 12.6.1)to" to "(see 12.6.1) to". p410: RingletSelect() is no longer used. Remove it. p411: Change "will be encoded" to "is encoded". (I apologize for a bad copy/paste on the original comment that asked for this with the wrong wording.) p412: Change all instances of "8" in Figures 12.5, 12.6, and 12.7 to "4". p414: Change "RingletSelection()" to "DefaultRinglet()". p416: Change ".)." to ".)". p417: Add Q_RX_ECHO_REQ and Q_TX_RS. p417: Add Dequeue() and Enqueue(). p417: RingletSelect() is no longer used. Remove it. p418: Change "Q_OAM_ECHO_REQ" to "Q_RX_ECHO_REQ". p419: Change ".)." to ".)". p422: Add Q_RX_ECHO_REQ, Q_RX_ECHO_RSP, Q_RX_FLUSH, Q_RX_ORG, and Q_TX_RS. p422: Add Dequeue() and Enqueue(). p423: Remove hyphen from "FlushRequest-Frame(txFrame);". p423: Add missing period, as directed by Comment 568. p424: Change "= CT_OAM_ECHO_REQ" to "== CT_OAM_ECHO_REQ" (unless superceded by following comment). p424: Instead of pulling from Q_RX_MAC, pull from Q_RX_ECHO_REQ, Q_RX_ECHO_RSP, Q_RX_FLUSH, and Q_RX_ORG. Merge Table 12.4 into Table 12.6, moving the associated text as well. p427: Change both instances "Clause 11" to "Clause 12" and correct the references to use Frame cross-references. p428: Change "Clause 11" to "Clause 12" and correct the reference to use a Frame cross-reference. p428: Move asterisks to the right side of the predicates. Clause 13: p431: Change "viewed as "containing" the MIB for that layer" to "viewed as each implementing the MIB for its respective layer", as directed by Comment 593. p431: Delete the last sentence, as directed by Comment 594. p432: Correct Heading3 style, as directed by Comment 595. p432: Change "The value of the mib_attribute." to "The value of the mib_attribute returned by the MLME_GET.request.", as directed by Comment 598. p432: Change "The status of the request." to "The status of the request returned as a result of the MLME_GET.request.", as directed by Comment 599. p433: Correct Heading3 style, as directed by Comment 597. p433: Change "The status of the request (SUCCESS or FAIL)" to "The status of the request returned as a result of the MLME_SET.request.", as directed by Comment 600. Also, add two lines of values as done for status for MLME_GET.request. p433: Change "from" to "in", as directed by Comment 602. p434: Correct cross-references in Table 13.1. p434: Remove the period after "operational state", as directed by Comment 605. p435: Change "Annex E" to "Annex D" and correct the reference to use a Frame cross-reference. p435: Add two lines of values as done for status for MLME_GET.request. p436: Add period after "frame-content-dependent information", as directed by Comment 613. p437: Why are half of the MIB attributes in italics? p438: Change "he agent" to "The agent". p438: Change "align with the wall clock" to "aligns with the wall clock". p438: Do we have a value yet for RFC xxxx in 13.3.3.2? Remove Editor's Note. p439: Change "Clause 12" to "Clause 13" and correct the reference to use a Frame cross-reference. p440: Change "Clause 13" to use a Frame cross-reference. p440: Add an asterisk after LME2. p440: Change "Table13.2 and Table 13.3" to use Frame cross-references. p440: Correct table border. Annex K: p694: Remove Editor's Note in K.2.3.