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Re: [Fwd: [802.21] We MUST improve the use and readability of the new commentary tool]



Title:
Peretz,
Andrea's connectivity  graph has not been discussed in  our  adhoc  telecon.
If I remember correctly, this was discussed within  a very small group. If you
feel this will  clarify  the  model,  we can certainly discuss it.

Thanks,
-Subir 

Peretz Feder wrote:
Thanks Subir:

Didn't we agree to add Andrea's connectivity graph to the IS Reference Model description"

Is comment 3 empty?

Peretz Feder

On 9/19/2005 6:48 PM, Peretz Feder wrote:



Subject:
Re: [802.21] We MUST improve the use and readability of the new commentary tool
From:
Subir Das <subir@RESEARCH.TELCORDIA.COM>
Date:
Mon, 19 Sep 2005 12:13:25 -0400

Peretz,
I did send the comment and corresponding  remedy. I have checked the  master .USR file. 
It seems that  comment and remedy are merged as comment in some cases. I am sending the
original document for your reference.

Thanks,
-Subir

Peretz Feder wrote:
Dear 802.21 members:

As I can't make this upcoming meeting in Cal, I have been trying to catch up
with your contributions through the commentary file.

In contrast to the 802.16 commentary methodology, many of your comments are hard
to decipher and probably stem from the first attempt to use this commentary tool.

Please try to use commentary as a specific replacement tool to exiting text or
as a mechanism for adding text to various sections within the draft. Many of the
comments I list below are impossible to follow and miss to communicate the
message. Please try to follow the format I used for comments 147-159. Please
specify exactly the section(s), page(s) and lines effected. Please strike out
(in red like Ronny did) the removed text and add in (Red) the differential new text.

Also my tool reads many empty comments (listed below). I wonder if it is an
exporting issue when trying to combine.

Eric: What is comment 9? what section?
Eric Comments 8, 10, 11, 12, 13: have no remedy, these are only open statements
Eric comment 14: are you referring to Network Selection? Please specify original
text
Eric comment 15: what is the original text you are referring to?
Eric comment 18: and 19? what is the remedy?
Eric comment 21: too open ended
Eric: comment 22: what should be taken out?
Eric comment 23, 24: "This" this what?
Eric comment 25: what is not true? please list the original text you are
objection to
Eric comment 28, 30:  It will be better to show the original text, strike out
the unwanted section and retype the new text instead
Eric comment 31: Replace what?
Eric comment 32, 34, 35, 47, 58, 59, 72, 74, 75: - empty comments as read by my
commentary tool
Eric comment 37,38, 39, 40, 41, 42, 43, 44, 48, 49, 50, 51, 52, 53, 55, 57, 60,
61, 62, 63, 64, 69, 70, 71: all open ended, w/o remedy or proposed changes
Eric comment 45, 46, 54: Remedy = original text? I don't see your point here
Eric comment 56: Are you referring to one of the tables?
Eric comment 65, 66: Which table?
Eric comment 67, 73: Specific remedy?
Eric comment 76, 77: no remedy
Subir comment 78: Remedy = 6.3.1? Need to be more specific show old and new text
please
Subir comment 79: no remedy
Subir comment 80: empty comment
Subir comment 81: Remedy = 8.3.1?
Wolfgand comment 82, 83: empty comment
Vivek comment 85: Are you suggesting replacing the entire section?
Vivek comment 92: Delete lines 22-43 in what page, what text to delete?
Vivek comment 92: Which table? which section? what pages?
Vivek 93: Delete Annex D? why? what reason? what about all the valuable 3GPP and
3GPP2 events? why delete? what replaces it?
Vivek 94: what page? section? What is the remedy? table 5? where is table 5?
Vivek comments 95, 96: remedy is 5.5.4? Why are we removing MIH_MGMT_SAP?
Vivek comment 97: remedy is 7? what is 7?
Ronny comment 100: Remedy = 5.1.9?
Ronny comment 109; empty comment as read by my commentary tool
Jin Lee comment 116: empty comment
Yoshihiro comment 120: Why remove table 6?
Yoshihiro comment 122: why remove figure 22?
Yoshihiro comment 123: why remove table 7?
Yoshihiro comment 129, 130: Why remove annex C.2, C.3, C.4?
Yoshihiro comment 133: empty comment
Srinivas comment 134: why remove section 7.2.13 and 7.2.14?
Srinivas comments 135, 136, 136: What is the next text?
Srinivas comment 138; Why remove 7.2.16, 7.2.16, 7.2.17?
Srinivas comment 139: Solve what? what is the proposed text change?
Srinivas comments 140, 141: What is the proposed new text?
Srinivas comment 142: what page? what is the new proposed text?
Srinivas comment 143, 144: What page? what old text being changed? what is new text?
Srinivas comment 145: Must be changed to allow also MIHF in network to access
info. Ok what is the proposed new text?
Srinivas comment 145: empty comment
Qiaobing comment 161: empty comment
Benjamin comment 163, 164: Insert in 6.2.2 and 6.3.3. where in relation to
existing text?
Benjamin comment 165: What page? what section (my commentary tool reads section
25???)
Benjamin comment 166: empty comment


Peretz Feder