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[802.3_PDCC] rewrite homework item



All – at the PDCC meeting, I took the action item to propose a rewrite of the statement below, so it did not require careful parsing of a comma to indicate that that the requirement referred to all external paired conductor cables with a diameter of 0.4mm:

 

Chad:

PSE circuits connected to external paired conductor cable, such as those described in Table 13 of IEC 62368-1, having a minimum wire diameter of 0,4 mm shall have the current limited to not more than 1,3 A.

 

 

I ended up with 2 versions, which I was arguing with myself over, and between Chad and Geoff they each preferred one or the other for the same reasons.  Hence, please provide your insight &/or preference:

 

George1: this one goes for 2 shorter sentences, easier to parse for non-native speakers (or to translate); however, it is a bigger change in the actual text:

PSE circuits connected to external paired conductor cable having a minimum wire diameter of 0,4 mm shall have the current limited to not more than 1,3 A.  Examples of such cables are described in Table 13 of IEC 62368-1.

 

George2: this one makes a smaller text change, just moving an existing clause within the sentence to avoid the comma-break.  However, it is a complex sentence, more difficult to parse:

 

PSE circuits connected to external paired conductor cable having a minimum wire diameter of 0,4 mm, such as those described in Table 13 of IEC 62368-1, shall have the current limited to not more than 1,3 A. 

 

 

George Zimmerman, Ph.D.

President & Principal

CME Consulting, Inc.

Experts in Advanced PHYsical Communications

george@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

310-920-3860

 

 

George Zimmerman, Ph.D.

President & Principal

CME Consulting, Inc.

Experts in Advanced PHYsical Communications

george@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

310-920-3860

 


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