Thanks for these, Xiaofei.
I have the following comments:
|
CID |
Clause Number(C) |
Page(C) |
Line(C) |
Comment |
Proposed Change |
Resolution |
Comment on proposed resolution |
|
1498 |
9.4.5.100 |
31 |
18 |
The definition of "Content ID" is very poor and does not indicate a format or value type. |
Add the following text after the cited sentence: "The format of the ID is an integer in the range 0..65535". Alternatively a reference
to the definition in clause 9.4.2.301 could be added. |
Revised: |
I don't think we need this, because "Unless specified otherwise, a number in a field is encoded as an unsigned integer." is already
stated in Subclause 9.2.2 |
|
1067 |
9.4.2.302 |
28 |
7 |
In the text "A value 0 in the
eBCS Request Status subfield indicates that the request for the
eBCS identified by the Content ID included in the same
eBCS Response Info subfield is denied." I do not think denied is the correct word. |
Change to cannot be satisfied |
Revised: change "is denied" to "cannot be satisfied". |
"is refused"?
"cannot" is vague |
|
1560 |
9.4.2.302 |
28 |
20 |
Does Time To Termination subfield need 4 octets? Shouldn't a value be necessary when the period is not determined? (Or, is the field
not present when not determined?) Is value 0 valid? How is this subfield used? Is it explained somewhere in clause 11? (Something like, the AP receives this value and determines the Time To Termination subfield value in the
eBCS Response.) |
Please verify. |
Revised.
|
I don't think referring to a
subclause for another element like this is a good idea, as it can lead to spec rot.
If you want to have a field with the same description in two places, then move it to
Subclause 9.4.1 |
|
1483 |
9.4.2.302 |
27 |
12 |
What is an
eBCS AP STA? |
Change "eBCS AP STA" to "eBCS AP" |
Accepted |
|
|
1116 |
9.4.2.301 |
27 |
6 |
"A value of 1 in the Requested Time To Termination subfield indicates that a Requested Time To Termination subfield is present in the
same eBCS Request Info subfield" |
Replace "Requested Time To Termination" in
FIgure 9-bc8 with "Requested Time To Termination Present" |
Accepted |
Is this in line with the resolutions for the other comments about the naming inconsistency? |
|
1364 |
11.100.5 |
56 |
38 |
"An
eBCS STA
that is
the broadcaster
of one
or more
eBCSs shall
start to
transmit eBCS
Termination 38 |
Change to "An
eBCS STA
shall start
to transmit
eBCS Termination |
Accepted |
|
|
1340 |
11.100.4 |
56 |
24 |
"to
request one
or more
of such
eBCSs" should be just "to request these
eBCSs" |
Revised: Change "to request one or more of such
eBCSs" to "to request these eBCSs" |
Should be Accepted |
|
|
1221 |
11.100.4 |
56 |
30 |
"Time of Termination field" should be "Time Of Termination filed". |
Please revise according to the comment. |
Revised: change "Time to Termination field" to "Time To Termination field" |
Should be |
Thanks,
Mark
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Dear Marc,
I have prepared the CR for some CIDs.
The CR document is 11-21-94r0 and 11-21-570r0. I can present the docs if there is time for them tomorrow.
Best regards,
Xiaofei Clement Wang
Principal Engineer | InterDigital
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