stds-802-16: SYSREQ COMMENT:

[Francois Simon <fsimon@pilotresearch.com>]

[Simon] 
[Francois]


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[To provide the correct 'market' references.]


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[Propose to replace "rain fall" by "atmospheric conditions"]
[Atmospheric conditions, other than rain fall, such as snow,
hail, fog and clouds may also alter the operating range of
802.16 radios.]

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[Correcting the spelling of "Services".]

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[Propose to delete "ISDN-PRI" from the list]
[The list already contains "Q.931" which is the ITU-T signaling
protocol for ISDN BRI and PRI; therefore "ISDN PRI" is
redundant.]

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[Propose to add "Q.2931" to the list]
[ATM, as mentioned elsewhere in the document, provides support for
telephony and video conferencing, it seems natural that the 
signaling protocol should be mentioned here.]

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[Propose to add "(Q.931)" between "protocols" and "to establish".]
[Provides the reader with a reference to the ATM message-based 
signaling protocols.]

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[Provides the reader with a reference to the Frame Relay signaling
protocol.]

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[Propose to replace "rain fall" with "atmospheric conditions"]
[Atmospheric conditions, other than rain fall, such as snow,
hail, fog and clouds may also affect the target performance levels.]

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[Propose to replace "rain fall (rain rate and droplet size and 
other factors)" with "atmospheric conditions (e.g. rain rate and 
droplet size and other factors)".]
[Atmospheric conditions, other than rain fall, such as snow,
hail, fog and clouds contributes also to excessive attenuation]

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[Propose to replace "rain fall" with "atmospheric conditions"]
[Same reason as the previous comment.]

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[Propose to replace "rain fall" by "atmospheric conditions"]
[Same reason as the previous comment.]

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[Propose to replace "rain fall" by "atmospheric conditions"]
[Same reason as the previous comment.]

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[The sentence is meaningless as it stands.]


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[Propose to replace "maximum error rates" with "minimum error 
rates"]
[While it can be viewed both ways, a positive statement is better 
than a negative one.]

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[Propose to replace "rain" with "atmospheric conditions"]
[Atmospheric conditions, other than rain fall, such as snow,
hail, fog and clouds contributes also to attenuation]

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[Moving the word "Rate" from the end of "Non-Real-Time" and 
place it after "Variable Bit" so that the expression reads 
"Variable Bit Rate: Non-Real-Time"]
[Provides consistency with ATM Forum definition.]

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[Propose to reorder the list in the following order: "Fault 
management; Configuration management; Accounting management; 
Performance management; Security management]
[This is a very minute point.  This change provides the order 
compatibility with the acronym FCAPS (Fault, Configuration, 
Accounting, Performance, Security) being commonly used in 
the industry to specify the 5 network management disciplines]

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[Propose adding the following, or equivalent, at the end of the 
paragraph: "The 802.16 protocols MUST also permits the 
subscribers to monitor performance service parameters of the 
802.16 services being provided at the delivery point"]
[The current trend in the industry is that more and more 
'users' of telecommunications services want to monitor the service 
being provided to them to insure adherence to the SLAs.  The 
current text seems to address the 802.16 Operator view point only]

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[Provides compatibility with this version of the document]

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[No particular change proposed]
[The 802.16 working group(s) may want to look at the work that 
as already being done by the 802.11 related to security (this 
may have already been done). It is no way suggested here that an 
802.11 network has commonality with an 802.16 network.  However, 
they may have similar security issues.]

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[Facilitate the reading of the document]

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[Delete the space between "station from" and the start of next 
line]
[Facilitate the reading of the document]

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[Propose to add "CoS" to the list: "CoS - Class of Service"]
[The change provide consistency with the rest of the table; 
QoS is specified]

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[E]
[Removing of "rate" at the end of "Variable Bit Rate: 
Non-Real-Time rate" so that it reads: 
"Variable Bit Rate: Non-Real-Time"]
[Provides consistency with ATM Forum definition.]