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stds-802-16: SYSREQ COMMENT:




[Submitter's Last Name] 
Guillemette

[Submitter's First Name]
Phil

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete "This form ... the MAC protocol layer."

[Reason for Edit]
This sentence seems to imply an implementation and not a requirement.

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[Submitter's Last Name] 
Guillemette

[Submitter's First Name]
Phil

[Starting Page #]
10

[Starting Line #]
31

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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete paragraph.

[Reason for Edit]
The content of the paragraph seems to fall under availability and QoS which
are later in the document.  It does not add any requirement and is not very
informative.
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[Submitter's Last Name] 
Guillemette

[Submitter's First Name]
Phil

[Starting Page #]
10

[Starting Line #]
36

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grammar, etc.]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete paragraph.

[Reason for Edit]
The information is not required.
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[Submitter's Last Name] 
Guillemette

[Submitter's First Name]
Phil

[Starting Page #]
11

[Starting Line #]
23

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grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete lines 23, 24, 25, and 26 up to "ATM standards define..."

[Reason for Edit]
The information is not relevant to what 802.16 is trying to do.
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[Submitter's Last Name] 
Guillemette

[Submitter's First Name]
Phil

[Starting Page #]
11

[Starting Line #]
29

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grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete line 29 and line 30 up to "802.16 protocols..."

[Reason for Edit]
Information is not relevant.
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[Submitter's Last Name] 
Guillemette

[Submitter's First Name]
Phil

[Starting Page #]
11

[Starting Line #]
29

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, 
grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
change "SHOULD" to "MUST"

[Reason for Edit]
This is an important service, and like IP and voice, it must be supported.
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[Submitter's Last Name] 
Guillemette

[Submitter's First Name]
Phil

[Starting Page #]
11

[Starting Line #]
32

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, 
grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete sentence starting with "Thus". 

[Reason for Edit]
This requirement is pretty hard to test for.  Not really the type of
requirement that the document is trying to highlight.
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[Submitter's Last Name] 
Guillemette

[Submitter's First Name]
Phil

[Starting Page #]
12

[Starting Line #]
10

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grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete section

[Reason for Edit]
There is no requirement in this section.
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[Submitter's Last Name] 
Guillemette

[Submitter's First Name]
Phil

[Starting Page #]
16

[Starting Line #]
22

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grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
delete the two sentences starting at "This ..."

[Reason for Edit]
This information is not required.
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[Submitter's Last Name] 
Guillemette

[Submitter's First Name]
Phil

[Starting Page #]
16

[Starting Line #]
43

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grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
delete sentence beginning with "Note..."

[Reason for Edit]
serves no purpose.
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[Submitter's Last Name] 
Guillemette

[Submitter's First Name]
Phil

[Starting Page #]
21

[Starting Line #]
16

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, 
grammar, etc.]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
delete until line 36

[Reason for Edit]
Integrated Services are not likely to play a very big role, if any at all,
in IP QoS.