stds-802-16: TG1 COMMENT: editorial comments (58)

["Roger B. Marks" <r.b.marks@ieee.org>]

{This message of yesterday from Ken Stanwood was bounced by the reflector.}

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
I would like to see the table of contents go to lower level paragraphs.

[Reason for Edit]
It was difficult to find things when performing the review.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Indentation of explanation of acronyms should be indented further.

[Reason for Edit]
HL-MAA, LL-MAA, and UGS-AD run into their explanations.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
LOS should be added to the acronym list.

[Reason for Edit]
It is included in the document.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change the word "user" to "use".

[Reason for Edit]
Correct grammar.

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The start of the first sentence is damaged, apparently by a missing section
reference.   The same thing happens on line 23.  By the way, it is the third
time we've said the exact same thing in 3 pages.

In line 6, "encryption., it" should be changed to "encryption.  It"

Line 29 has a double period at the end of the line.

[Reason for Edit]
Typos.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
There is an extra space before the period at the end of the sentence.

[Reason for Edit]
Typos.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
This section, through page 10, line 18, including Figure 4, uses the terms
BTS and STS.  The remainder of the document uses Base Station and CPE.
Either we add BTS and STS to the acronym list and use them throughout the
document or we change this section, including the figure.

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency and completeness.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change the word "expected" to "allowed".

[Reason for Edit]
Correctness - the standard can not support mobile CPEs, therefore they are
not allowed.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change the word "are" to "is".

[Reason for Edit]
Grammar - the noun, One addition, and the verb, are, do not match.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The text "the user of encryption. that" should be changed to "the use of
encryption so that".

[Reason for Edit]
typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "protoco" to "protocol".  Insert a space in "commonmodulation"

[Reason for Edit]
Typos.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The figure and figure reference are missing.  Also, this document should not
show the "802.16" protocol stack, but the "802.16.1" protocol stack.

Additionally, line 35 refers to "special" protocols.  We should say what we
mean, not use cute, ambiguous term.

[Reason for Edit]
Typos, quality.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete the entire paragraph.

[Reason for Edit]
This whole paragraph is misleading.  The TC layer is a layer between the DLC
and the PHY.  This is a very different topic than the "convergence
sub-layers" being described here and is confusing with our true TC layers
described in the PHY section of the document.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete the phrase "the MAC protocol is simple".

[Reason for Edit]
It's an untrue editorial comment.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "and cell radius" to ", modulation, and FEC".

[Reason for Edit]
No one is likely to be changing the cell radius quickly to accommodate
weather conditions.  We do, however, have the ability to change modulation
and FEC, especially in PHY mode B.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change this requirement to a meaningful one.

[Reason for Edit]
This is a very "low bit rate" opinion of when to declare the link
unavailable.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Remove the word "be" after the word "is".

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Remove period at end of bullet.

[Reason for Edit]
Consistency with other bullets.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert a space between the word "Constant" and the period of the preceding
sentence.

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
"64- bit" should be "EUI-64".

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity and completeness .

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert the bulleted list referenced by the text or delete the reference.

[Reason for Edit]
typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete "(PHY Type = 4)" from the figure heading.

[Reason for Edit]
The figure applies to all PHY types and there is no longer a PHY type 4.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete extra period before the word "Figure".

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change PCD to UCD.

Additionally, PCD occurs throughout the document.  It should be either UCD
or DCD depending upon which message it pertains to.  Additionally, there are
places in the document where "Physical Channel Descriptor" should be changed
to either "Uplink Channel Descriptor" or "Downlink Channel Descriptor".

[Reason for Edit]
With increased functionality in the PHY, the PCD message was split into the
separate UCD and DCD messages, but the change didn't fully ripple through
the document.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The font of "PCD Count" (which really should be "UCD Count") should match
the other items being described.

[Reason for Edit]
Format.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "allow" to "allowed".  In line 59, add the word "and" after the word
"Header".

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert the following sentence at the end of the description currently in the
value column: "If this TLV is used, the Ranging Status TLV must be set to
1".

[Reason for Edit]
Reduce ambiguity.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The table should have a heading and a header as in Table 13 on page 88.

Also, the redundant copies of the table should be removed.

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
The text "refer to 2.3" should be "refer to section 2.3".

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert a space before the word "Figure".

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
There should be a paragraph describing under what circumstances the CID in
the MAC header is the Basic CID, or the multicast CID.  Does it depend upon
what CID the Mulitcast Poling Assignment Request was sent on?

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity, reduction of ambiguity.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change the word "defines" to "defined".

Also on line 12, insert the word "with" before "a 20 Mbaud".

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Reference to Figure 39 should be Figure 52.

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Line should end with the word "CPEs".

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "CPE" to "CPEs".

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Wait for map for this channel" to Wait for UL-MAP for this channel".

[Reason for Edit]
Eliminate ambiguity.

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Some strange overlay of text happened.

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert "by" before "16-QAM".

Also, on line 3, replace "modulations" with "modulation's".

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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Extraneous Figure heading on this line and again on line 63.

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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Extraneous Figure heading.

This happens throughout the remainder of the PHY sections

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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This line should be above the figure or below the heading.

The same thing happens on page 283, line 37.

[Reason for Edit]
Format.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
A Figure identical to Figure 139 should be here showing the structure like
Figure 124 shows the structure for PHY Mode A.

[Reason for Edit]
Clarity and Completeness.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert the word "transmission" before the word "convergence".

Also at line 47 Insert "Transmission" before "Convergence" in both of the
lower convergence layers of the Figure.

[Reason for Edit]
Eliminate ambiguity and maintain consistency with the rest of the document.

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This line should be inside the left box of the last row of the table.

[Reason for Edit]
Format.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Extraneous Table Heading.

This happens throughout the remainder of the PHY sections.

[Reason for Edit]
Formatting error.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Text is missing.

Occurs again on Page 292, line 7 and page 293, line 11.

[Reason for Edit]
Formatting Error.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Table 72" to "Figure xxx".

Same error occurs on page 292, line 29.

[Reason for Edit]
Formatting Error.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Figure to "Table".

[Reason for Edit]
Formatting Error.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Equation should be inserted properly.

[Reason for Edit]
Formatting Error.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Table needs a heading.

This occurs again on page 297, line 4; page 297, line 44; page 298, line 4;
and various other tables throughout the remainder of the PHY section.

[Reason for Edit]
Formatting Error.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Fourth vertical line showing start of physical channels should line up with
the start of the second CPE transition Gap.

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
"Figure" should be "Table" and should be moved below text so it is at top of
table.

[Reason for Edit]
Format.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Table appears to be missing.

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Referenced Figure is missing and heading appears as text rather than as
heading.

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Figure heading should start with "Figure xxx".

Same thing occurs again on page 306, line 46.

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Should properly include equation.

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Extraneous Section heading.

[Reason for Edit]
Typo.

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TBD

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Remainder of document is mostly TBD.

[Reason for Edit]
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