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stds-802-16: TG1 COMMENTS

To: "'stds-802-16@ieee.org'" <stds-802-16@ieee.org>
Subject: stds-802-16: TG1 COMMENTS
From: Ken Stanwood <ken@ensemblecom.com>
Date: Thu, 26 Oct 2000 20:38:38 -0700
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[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

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M

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etc.;
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comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "defined" to "defines"

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

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M

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etc.;
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comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete the entire paragraph.

[Reason for Edit]
The paragraph is an incorrect description conflicting with the correct
description given in the following subsections.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

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[Starting Page #]
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etc.;
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comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert space between period and open paranthesis.

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

[Membership Status: (M)ember; (O)bserver; (N)either]
M

[Starting Page #]
122

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[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "US-MAP" to "UL-MAP" in figure 60

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

[Membership Status: (M)ember; (O)bserver; (N)either]
M

[Starting Page #]
122

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[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Fix weird font in "UL-MAP"

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

[Membership Status: (M)ember; (O)bserver; (N)either]
M

[Starting Page #]
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[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "a traffic" to "traffic".
Change "connecion" to "connection"

[Reason for Edit]
typos

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

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M

[Starting Page #]
125

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etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete the sentence that starts "Piggy-back" and add a sentence at the end
of the second paragraph that states "The poll-me bit may be used to request
to be polled for a different, non-USG, connection."

[Reason for Edit]
Remove non USG concepts from USG section and make certain all USG concepts
are covered.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

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M

[Starting Page #]
125

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[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Bandwidth" to "Grant"

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

[Membership Status: (M)ember; (O)bserver; (N)either]
M

[Starting Page #]
125

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[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
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comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
delete the word "a" at the end of the line.

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

[Membership Status: (M)ember; (O)bserver; (N)either]
M

[Starting Page #]
127

[Starting Line #]
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[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert space between sentences.

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

[Membership Status: (M)ember; (O)bserver; (N)either]
M

[Starting Page #]
127

[Starting Line #]
52

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Insert "at" before "Registration"

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

[Membership Status: (M)ember; (O)bserver; (N)either]
M

[Starting Page #]
128

[Starting Line #]
55

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "certain connection" to "the SS".
On the next line, change "shorter or null opportunity to transmit" to
"shorter transmit opportunity than expected"
On line 57, change "any case" to "all cases".

[Reason for Edit]
clarity, correctness

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

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M

[Starting Page #]
131

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[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace Figure 63 with UnicastPolling.vsd which is separately mailed to
editors.

[Reason for Edit]
Figure contains CPE instead of SS.  Figure only shows adaptive modulation,
not bursts.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

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M

[Starting Page #]
132

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4

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
"CID" on lines 4, 8 (twice), and 39 appears to always have an extra
preceding space.

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

[Membership Status: (M)ember; (O)bserver; (N)either]
M

[Starting Page #]
133

[Starting Line #]
1

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Replace Figure 63 with Multicast_Polling.vsd which is separately mailed to
editors.

[Reason for Edit]
Figure contains CPE instead of SS.  Figure only shows adaptive modulation,
not bursts.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

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M

[Starting Page #]
135

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[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "CD" to "UCD"

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

[Membership Status: (M)ember; (O)bserver; (N)either]
M

[Starting Page #]
136

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[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
T

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Should add a "basic capability negotiation" step between ranging and IP
connectivity.

[Reason for Edit]
We have SO MANY flexible PHY features in this system as well as explicitly
optional features that it is unlikely that all SSs will implement all
options.  The BS needs to know an individual SSs capabilitites (Q64, ARQ,
turbo codes, etc.)

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

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M

[Starting Page #]
137

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etc.;
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comment on a section marked "TBD"]
TBD

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
resolve TBD

[Reason for Edit]
TBD

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

[Membership Status: (M)ember; (O)bserver; (N)either]
M

[Starting Page #]
137

[Starting Line #]
12

[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Should either make this generic to all PHYs or add sections for how it's
done with each PHY.

[Reason for Edit]
Current text is only correct for PHY mode A.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

[Membership Status: (M)ember; (O)bserver; (N)either]
M

[Starting Page #]
137

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[(T)echnical for Content-Related Material; (E)ditorial for typos, grammar,
etc.;
(G)eneral to identify a problem but not a solution; (TBD) for a
comment on a section marked "TBD"]
E

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Physical" to "Uplink"

[Reason for Edit]
reflect correct message names.
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