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stds-802-16: TG1 COMMENTS

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Subject: stds-802-16: TG1 COMMENTS
From: Ken Stanwood <ken@ensemblecom.com>
Date: Thu, 26 Oct 2000 20:39:59 -0700
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[Submitter's Last Name] 
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Ken

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Basic Service" to "Basic or Secondary Management Service".

[Reason for Edit]
A CPE must have both to be managed.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "connectionss" to "connections"

[Reason for Edit]
typo

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Ken

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "date" to "data"

[Reason for Edit]
typo

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[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "SS" to "the SS".

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
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Ken

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "Basic" to "secondary management"

[Reason for Edit]
The traffic on the Basic CID is never encrypted since it is likely to be
redundant and CBC doesn't handle that with great security.  If, however, the
Basic CID is just being used as a shortened SS ID for identifying Primary
SAs then the text could stand as long as this is explained more clearly.

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TBD

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Resolve reference

[Reason for Edit]
TBD

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Delete the phrase ", along with the SAID,"

[Reason for Edit]
The SAID is not in the MAC header, and must be derived from the CID.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change the EKS field in the MAC header to be only 2 bits.

[Reason for Edit]
Since only 2 active values are ever kept, a field with 4 possible values is
sufficient for detecting sequencing errors.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "and 40-bit DES are" to "is"

[Reason for Edit]
everywhere else in the document, only 56-bit DES is allowed.

[Submitter's Last Name] 
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Complete reference.

This occurs again on page 219, line 2; page 224, line 59; page 224, line 65,
and page 225, line 4.

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
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Ken

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TBD

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
resolve reference.

[Reason for Edit]
unresolved reference

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "one" to "one byte".

Same on page 229, line 42.
On page 230, line 22 change "two s" to "two bytes"

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Should say "Attributes are shown in Table 41."

This happens in the next section, too.

[Reason for Edit]
Floating tables make text refer to nothing.

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "one" to "one byte"
On line 49, change "two s" to "two bytes".
On line 59, change "more s" to "more bytes"

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
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[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

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[Starting Page #]
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TBD

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
resolve TBD

[Reason for Edit]
TBD

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[Submitter's First Name]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
What appears to be a header row in the table is really an entry and should
not be in bold type.  A header row with "data type" in the first column and
"structure" in the second column would be appropriate.

Also "0-n s" in the first row should be "0-n bytes"

[Reason for Edit]
typo

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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "3 s" to "3 bytes".
Later in the same line, change "3-" to "3-byte".
In line 12, change "3-" to "3-byte".
In line 37, change "three s" to "three bytes"
On page 241, line 6, change "6-" to "6-byte".

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
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[Submitter's First Name]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "128-" to either "128-byte" which conflicts with line 6, or
"128-bit".
Whichever is correct should also be done on page 244, line 21.

[Reason for Edit]
typo

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
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[Starting Page #]
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[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
Change "8-" to "8-byte".
On page 245, lines 53 and 58, the formatting is messed up.
On page 246, line 33, change "20-s" to "20 bytes"
On page 246, line 38, change "20" to "20-byte"
On page 248, line 38, change "8 s" to "8 bytes"
On page 248, line 51, change "one-" to "one-byte"
On page 249, line 11, change "1-" to "1-byte"
On page 250, line 10, change "as-signed" to "assigned"
On page 254, line 20, change "1-" to "1-byte"
On page 255, line 45, change "1-" to "1-byte"
On page 257, line 9, change "1-" to "1-byte"

[Reason for Edit]
typos

[Submitter's Last Name] 
Stanwood

[Submitter's First Name]
Ken

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[Starting Page #]
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TBD

[Detailed Description of Proposed Insertion, Deletion, Change]
resolve TBD

[Reason for Edit]
TBD
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